Basic Action Super Heroes!

What do you guys think? The idea is to bring more traffic to this forum and BAM.

That's awesome, makes me wish there were 15 or so pages of comic before it.

I would say though in the last panel, Until my next adventure, that if it were something along the lines of Until our next adventure or Until your next adventure it might have a whole Lord Kitchener "Your Country Wants You!" vibe to it.

(or something to give the impression that you get to play the hero/team of heroes)

That's very clever.

Looks just like a real comic book.

Pretty awesome. Love it.

A+

That's awesomesauce!

AngryGhost wrote:That's awesome, makes me wish there were 15 or so pages of comic before it.

I would say though in the last panel, Until my next adventure, that if it were something along the lines of Until our next adventure or Until your next adventure it might have a whole Lord Kitchener "Your Country Wants You!" vibe to it.

(or something to give the impression that you get to play the hero/team of heroes)

Agreed on this. It's more of a recruitment ad that way, which is should be! Heck, you might blow up that last panel to overlap the others a bit. Make it about 20-30% bigger? For the "your country wants you" vibe noted.

Otherwise...

Wow, BASHMAN. Really! Wow and Cool. And you know I'm a harsh art critic. Very cool for BASH!

Looks great. Though at that size hard for my 47 year old eyes to read. Reminds me of the old TSR ads that appeared on the back cover of comic books in the 80's.

Very nicely executed... You should create an RPG around this... oh wait a minute...

Regards,
Walt

I like it, but had to strain to read it.

And I wouldn't start by saying it was the ending of an adventure - it should be the start of an adventure

This is so awesome! I also agree with the others about the "our" adventure thing.

Now I'll day dream all day about this being an actual webcomic...

This is going to be a full page at the back of the new printing of BASH! UE (so it won't be too small to read then).

I can't wait for this new printing to come out!

Great comic. I'm hoping that the BASH Dice Roll Chart will still be found somewhere within!

As far as wording goes, the last word bubble "Until my next adventure..." has a ring that feels like the reader is somehow not included. Another alternative, which is more neutral, is to replace "my" with "the".

Until the next adventure...

I can't wait to see this book in my hands!

MrJupiter wrote:

Until the next adventure...

Two thoughts.

ONE.
I agree with everyone's thoughts on the last quote bit. What about thinking up a "signature line" that could come from that character to fill in there? One that hints at or means "Until the next adventure"... but as if he'd say it IN-CHARACTER to his team?

Sorta like Ben Grimm says "It's Clobberin' Time" and the Marvel Editors/Writers will work that into narration and story titles many times?


TWO.
Who's the villain with the neat helm/armor being punched out??? I want to see HIM in this new character book you're making! What about doing a contest for fans to make up the idea/stats for that character, and having it featured as the winner?
Additional thought. Are all the "iconics" of the original core BASH! book going to be included in that character book? They should be!!
Not only does it immediately up the character count by a dozen or more, but it's similar in the COOL idea/style to what the most recent ICONs character book did - but for BASH! ... which is ultimately much better. hehe


-kev-